HIS
When she saw Him across the room, she knew He had the fire of ownership. It was amazing how she could spot them now, the ones who would take her any way they wanted, and she would submit because of their power. It was a power that was unused, but felt...physical, but gentle... It wasn't an angry power. No, any man could lash out and hurt in anger. It was a confidence, a cockiness, an arrogance. Yet, not all arrogant, cocky, confident men had IT either.
He must have felt her watching Him and He turned His head in her direction. Their eyes met and she instantly, but deliberately, lowered hers. Any other man might have taken her eye avoidance to be a sign of her disinterest. But, not Him. A smile played on the corners of His lips as He gently removed Himself from the crowd that had gathered around to hear of His most recent adventure in the courtroom.
she could feel His gaze like a hot ember in the pit of her stomach. she could feel Him moving across the room. And when He reached her He put His arm protectively around her waist while handing her the champagne He had taken from the waiter on His way. His touch burned through her body. "Hello darling..." he said softly in her ear and she melted into Him.
He must have felt her watching Him and He turned His head in her direction. Their eyes met and she instantly, but deliberately, lowered hers. Any other man might have taken her eye avoidance to be a sign of her disinterest. But, not Him. A smile played on the corners of His lips as He gently removed Himself from the crowd that had gathered around to hear of His most recent adventure in the courtroom.
she could feel His gaze like a hot ember in the pit of her stomach. she could feel Him moving across the room. And when He reached her He put His arm protectively around her waist while handing her the champagne He had taken from the waiter on His way. His touch burned through her body. "Hello darling..." he said softly in her ear and she melted into Him.
posted by Anastasia at
1:27 PM
5 Comments:
Now, that was interesting. I rather enjoyed it. It's not quite a story in itself, but more like an opening scene for some story.
One, what made you post this here instead of on your blog where I would normally expect a "story"?
Two, where did you get the inspiration for this "story"?
I suppose I don't actually need an answer to number two, but I am a bit surprised (for the first time in a while) by your post. I'm not even sure why it's surprising, other than that it seems somehow "different" from your usual writing. I think I'm a bit disconcerted by not being able to tell whether the characters reflect you, Me, you and Me, or none of the above.
In any event, it did make Me happy.
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Frederick, at 4:35 PM
i wanted You to know how i feel everytime i see You across a crowded room. It is like i am seeing You for the first time after realizing the submissive part of myself. i see Your power and confidence and ownership capabilities. It is about how i want to show You that i am submissive in every move i make. (Even though i am not very good at it.) It is about how You make me feel like it (we) are new over and over despite the length of time we are us. And the end is about my fantasy of how it could be, how it should be.
i guess i went for a little bit of subtlety and it bombed. But, after reading it again and again, i like it...
i don't know why i posted it here. Maybe because i don't want it to just be a "story."
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Anastasia, at 5:29 PM
I like it, too. I said so the first time, and I like it even more, now, with your explanation. I would not say it 'bombed'. As I said, it just seemed 'different'. The fact you "went for a little bit of subtlety" completely explains to Me why it seemed 'different'. Please do not be so sensitive about My comment. I love your writing, I love how you see us, and I love how that is reflected in your writing.
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Frederick, at 6:16 PM
"It was amazing how she could spot them now, the ones who would take her any way they wanted, and she would submit because of their power."
I think this is the line that gave Me the most difficulty - the line that surprised Me and made Me unsure of who the characters represent.
I hate taking one sentence out of context like that, but I'm glad I think I finally figured out what was bugging Me.
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Frederick, at 4:51 PM
i am afraid it is somewhat true. Of course, it was mostly intended to throw you off the track in the beginning of the post. But, it is true. i think i am getting better at spotting those who have inclinations like our own. It was a little strong to suggest that she was theirs for the taking because in true life, that is so not true. Just a little creative writing...
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Anastasia, at 10:03 AM
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